you'll never be mine, so I'll give myself to the sky.

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    written during a deep depression
    freshman year of college.

    you'll never be mine, so I'll give myself to the sky.
    i'll rhyme my kiss with the words you never said
    make a poem out of the thoughts in your head
    edit them together with mine
    and delete the couplets 'till a couple's left behind.

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    ElegantFaith commented on you'll never be mine, so I'll give myself to the sky.

    08-29-2009

    WHO'S YOUR BOO? THE SKY OR ME?! mermaidmermaidmermaid
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    hdmac commented on you'll never be mine, so I'll give myself to the sky.

    08-29-2009

    Use capital letters to start your lines. Use more commas to break up your sentences.
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    In science one tries to tell people, in such a way as to be understood by everyone, something that no one ever knew before. But in poetry, it's the exact opposite.

    Franz Kafka (1883-1924) Czech writer.

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