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School assignment- Shakespeare sonnet in iambic pentameter.

You

I look into your eyes  and see oceans,
Swirling striations of green, brown, and blue,
And in those depths I see thoughts, emotions-
In those incredible eyes, I see you.

I see your laugh, your smile, how warm you are,
The dimples that crease your cheeks when you grin,
The gleam in your eye I see from so far
I compare my smile to yours- and you win.

I note your confidence, your grace, your walk-
Your shoulders give a nonchalant shrug-
The way your face shines with light when you talk-
How you wrap you arms around me to hug.

My thoughts circle you, but you do not see.
Sometimes I wonder though- do you see me?

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snicklefrits92 commented on You

11-01-2010

Wow i like that. This seems really well thought out. Its amazing. At least i think it is

Poetry is when an emotion has found its thought and the thought has found words.

Robert Frost (1875-1963) American Poet.

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