Some Peace

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    Some Peace

    I've been swimming,
    In this ocean of confusion,
    I've been drifting,
    Blind for way too long...
    All I see,
    Are the images inside my mind,
    I feel so weak,
    Though I'm expected to be strong...

    I can't stand the thoughts,
    Gathering in my head,
    It's hard to control,
    The impulses I feel...
    I'm suffocating slowly,
    I can't take it anymore,
    Is this all a dream,
    Or is it real?

    What if I acted on,
    Each idea I had?
    What would be,
    A way I could be free?
    If life is just a ride,
    I feel like getting off,
    All I really want,
    Is just some peace...

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    kochab commented on Some Peace

    08-15-2009

    I feel that the entire poem was very strong with the exception of the ending, but I also feel that perhaps could have been an intentional play done to show you done have the peace which you search for. In either regards you have a great thing going on here, dont doubt it.
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    laydbak1 commented on Some Peace

    06-25-2009

    Some torments must be faced with the anxiousness of a cornered rabbit staring into the sharp teeth of a pack of hounds at bay... They cannot be shut out, just closing our eyes... A good write...
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    kmooney commented on Some Peace

    05-29-2009

    Keli, this is a cool poem. I like it a lot. Really makes me stop and think. Good use of imagery. It's like I'm floating in the ocean one minute and on a carnival ride the next. I, too, have had similar feelings. Not sure what is real and what is illusion. There have been times that I was dreaming and it felt so real and other times that I just wished it was all just a dream. Very thought provoking. I really like your style. You are very talented. I know you read and commented on some
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    Poetry is not an expression of the party line. It's that time of night, lying in bed, thinking what you really think, making the private world public, that's what the poet does.

    Allen Ginsberg (1926-1997) U.S. poet.

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