Open your eyes...

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    Open your eyes...

     When we open our eyes,
    We can see all the lies,
    The ones we despise,
    The things we deny,
    The things we hate,
    The one little date,
    We gave them the bait,
    To win the long wait,
    We sent them away,
    What did we say,
    I knew we would pay,
    For that one lonely day,
    That was the light,
    That started the fight,
    And lasted the night.

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    crimsomdeath commented on Open your eyes...

    01-12-2010

    Nice rhyme and great emotion. flows smoothly too. keep penning away I look forward to more of your work.
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    Rayen commented on Open your eyes...

    01-11-2010

    nice work you make your poem flow and you put your feeling in the poem so it seems
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    charles52 commented on Open your eyes...

    01-10-2010

    VictoriaM: You make the words work well together. Again, great pace. I 'm big on pace, move the poem along. You do! Thanks for the read. Charles
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    Poetry is not an expression of the party line. It's that time of night, lying in bed, thinking what you really think, making the private world public, that's what the poet does.

    Allen Ginsberg (1926-1997) U.S. poet.

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