Lost Dreamer : May 1, 2009 9:15pm Doha, Qatar

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    Lost Dreamer : May 1, 2009 9:15pm Doha, Qatar

    I have always wanted to hold you

    Deep inside I longed for your sweet and tender touch

     

    I have always wanted to say a simple hi

    Words left unspoken by my heart

     

    I have always wanted to make you mine

    Love you till the end of time

     

    Wish you could see me

    To unfold the lost dreamer in me

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    rougepriest commented on Lost Dreamer : May 1, 2009 9:15pm Doha, Qatar

    09-17-2009

    this is much better in my opinion it has a rhyme! The last line of a poem is generally shorter than the one preceding it. like you did in the middle stanzas.keeps the flow going in a pattern.

    gogant commented on Lost Dreamer : May 1, 2009 9:15pm Doha, Qatar

    09-17-2009

    Ah, such sweet dreams rolled up into a lovely poem...

    hany

    09/17/2009

    tnx.. just trying to express how i feel through my pen

    If I feel physically as if the top of my head were taken off, I know that is poetry.

    Emily Dickinson (1830-1886) American poet.

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