Heroine

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  • Sadness

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    one of my close friends died and i didnt know how to deal with the pain

    Heroine

    Steel Moving through Her Veins
    Blood Shot Seeking For light
    Hands Shaking, Body Weightless
    This feeling Isnt Wrong But These Actions Arent Right
    Mind As Empty As Her Eyes
    Lips As Pale As Her skin
    She Lay Stiff Now
    Heart Stopped For She Is
    Dead Of Her Sin.

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    ForeverPoet commented on Heroine

    06-27-2010

    very powerful write. and so sad. you have a good vision of things. keep writing! when life is unfathomable, poetry is the imaginable!
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    jesterescapade commented on Heroine

    06-22-2010

    Great emotion. It puts you there looking right at the subject. Visually sharp, Great read.
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    SuSpence commented on Heroine

    06-22-2010

    Very poingantly sad write, in so few words. You have crafted this piece eloquently stasia. So good for such a short write, truly. 'This feeling Isnt Wrong But These Actions Arent Right' she was chasing a dream, but using the wrong mode. Very poetic. Like John Lennon said in his song of his heroine use, when you get sucked in 'Happiness is a Warm Gun'. Very sad (((Stasia))) Sorry you lost someone close to you. But poetry is a great way to deal with it. Keep it up, I see a lot of talent in just this one piece. ~Spence
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    Poetry is when an emotion has found its thought and the thought has found words.

    Robert Frost (1875-1963) American Poet.

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