Green

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Green

I found a map of counties and you
found yourself alone
Read this paper
Travel home
Reciting mine
not yours

It seems Mchale had lost his will
Because life was not a dream
But when he walked off with his girl
I felt myself turn green

I could tell you what I heard
Of slowly forming terms
I know you think you need to know
But trust me this one hurts

Planning starts to fall apart
When I fall out the door
With spectators proped up on walls
Simply playing introverts

Not a pretty picture
No
When logic defies scripture
And a most disturbing color shows
The most disturbing people

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kpeery09 commented on Green

11-22-2010

Very Nice, when I saw the words "walk away with his girl" and "I felt myself turn green" Do you know what I imagined when I read that line? I imagined someone actually turning into a real life version of the Hulk. Its like this seriously wants me to say Fantastic to it. I give you 10.

brokenhearted11 commented on Green

11-22-2010

wow, i love when new poets turn out to be amazing :) so, needless to say, i enjoy this :) haha... so a 9 from me keep writing

christianprep commented on Green

11-21-2010

I loved it good job agian you should write more poems... I like Reading these too i can only wait too see what u post next... nice job 10

Sydney commented on Green

11-21-2010

wow, this is really good. got me at the edge of my seat wanting to know more. Sydney

koolmom0 commented on Green

11-21-2010

Very well written, I look forward to reading more from you.:) Koolmom0

Poetry is finer and more philosophical than history; for poetry expresses the universal, and history only the particular.

Aristotle (384 BC-322 BC) Greek philosopher.

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