Echo...

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    Echo...

    "...you have one duck... I saw it."
    "no crickets, but yes, the sound"
    ~I have some fish, swimming around...

    Who are you? And where do you be?
    As I walk this forest, how do you, see me?
    A cricket's sound, some fish around,
    But you and you lost to my sea.
    Why, do you two follow me?

    An open door, extended before,
    A hand, a smile, I waited awhile, with
    hopes and maybe some fantasy.
    I hoped you woulda, woulda hit on me.
    But in retro, I did so see...

    My time of past, dyes deep and fast,
    a flow, a hum, my life was numb.
    In a time of change, I rearranged,
    the elements of my being.
    I changed, to my Me Becoming.
    And I stopped in my tracks,
    while in my running.

    Hanging there was Venus dear,
    A photo I gave you, from above.
    The Sun ablaze, the Moon amazed,
    while I heard your Heart. My love...

    But questioned I when you raised an I,
    and you didn't reply to my song?
    I sang again! And I glared at you then,
    but you turned, as though I were wrong?
    A butterfly, a kiss by your eye... and yet,
    I still wonder why your park is gone.
    And the Indian Sang, but you heard no song?

    ~Know. The journey is Long...

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    IzzyGumbo commented on Echo...

    01-21-2010

    sometimes, when you're certain you know something... it's almost impossible to stop feeling it. I have conversations with certain moments of my life. This poem is one of them. :) hard to explain. but I hope that helps.

    danmartyjake1 commented on Echo...

    01-04-2010

    I think you are talented and I tried to read this one a few times searching for the line or connection to follow within it. Still it demonstrates have some great rhyming skills and though I did not understand this one, as much, Keep Writing! You have a very sensual erotic style with nature and poetry.

    RJK commented on Echo...

    12-12-2009

    You have very color full smooth way of your words. As I liked the discriptions individually together i'm not seeing the story line in it. Odds are it's me so if you could light up the dark so I can see that would be nice. Thanks

    IzzyGumbo

    01/21/2010

    I was writing this to someone who visits my mind ... I walked in his park once. Inspiration for a poem I guess :)

    Stryx commented on Echo...

    11-30-2009

    I am back and think your numbers are not nealy high enough.

    Stryx

    11/30/2009

    But it is too late. No more numbers to give...

    Stryx commented on Echo...

    10-10-2009

    The one word that stands out in your poetry is sensuality. Wow.

    Poetry is either something that lives like fire inside you or else it is nothing, an empty formalized bore around which pedants can endlessly drone their notes and explanations.

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