Cry Baby

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    Cry Baby

    Watch me turn the page.
    Watch me burn the bridge.
    Watch me turn my back on you.

    See you fall at my feet
    as I once fell at yours.
    Watch me kick you in the stomach.

    Come on baby,
    just close your eyes baby.
    It'll be a ride baby.

    These eyes won't cry another drop.
    Baby, baby somebody's gonna cry tonight.
    Baby, baby but it won't be my tears tonight.

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    bklynrizz commented on Cry Baby

    02-09-2010

    These eys have seen alot of love but they'll never see.......Yeah, I know that song, too! As for this poem, I like how you used hints of cliches. Rather creative. The first two lines of the second stanza are good but the last line is a bit abrubt. Kick you when your down, maybe? The third stanza, maybe if you the last two baby's? Just a suggestion. Keep writing, it's a good way to release stress.
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    DeanPeter commented on Cry Baby

    01-23-2010

    ever hear the song "THESE EYEs?" Well its about twice your age but sounds pRTETTY close... just ribbin ya. nice work... There is a song called these eyes though LOL .DP
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