Be aware who you let into your life

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Be aware who you let into your life

Are you being careful who you let into your life. you better think twice Because the devil is'nt nice.he,s just waiting for an opportunity to sneek His way in, even if he have't to pretend to be your friend . he will stare you straight into your eye's but at the same time he's just telling lies . so don't be deceive by what you see, just ask god for his wisdom you won't get traped any more in captivity. don't listen to the devil lies because he's only a thief in disguise. so be careful who you let in,  and pay close attention to what they say. and don't ever be afraid to simple stand up and just walk away. 

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CongoNetherland commented on Be aware who you let into your life

07-01-2009

Spellcheck, please. AND WHY ARE YOU SCREAMING IN CAPS?? Give us a break. Invoking the Devil - or God - is not to be considered lightly. And you are writing in prose, not poetry. Break your lines to express yourself. This poem sucks for these reasons. I want to help you see that. The two things you have going for you in this is: 1. Your rhyme is not bad. Good rhyme is fun. 2. The Devil, and God, are powerful - putting them in your poem will bring anyone to a point of interest. DON'T SQUANDER IT. Like you did. I hope this helps. Spellcheck. Grammercheck. Don't club us over the head WITH CAPITAL LETTERS. Otherwise, good job.

patlee commented on Be aware who you let into your life

06-07-2009

These words could not have been more true. Because he's just a thief that comes to steal, kill and destroy anthing that's positive.

centrella

06/07/2009

thanks patlee for reading and understanding the word of God. would you like to be my new friend hit me back. God bless

If I feel physically as if the top of my head were taken off, I know that is poetry.

Emily Dickinson (1830-1886) American poet.

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